would anyone be the kindest nicest person on the earth and read my crucible essay i need help desperately (1 Viewer)

[helloworld987]

i did trials and my crucible essay was severely my weakest essay by a long shot (i got 14/20) and so ive been editing my essay quite a lot to make it better but ive been trying to organise a meeting with my teacher for weeks and each time she says she's too busy so id be really grateful if someone could read and give me their feedback
my feedback was that:
- i need develop my thesis to establish a more convincing thesis
- to embed evidence more effectively by contextualising it in the play
- make a more sustained examination of the play
- develop my arguments before analysing them

 

[bj_flamingo]

reading now

 

[tigerian]

i did trials and my crucible essay was severely my weakest essay by a long shot (i got 14/20) and so ive been editing my essay quite a lot to make it better but ive been trying to organise a meeting with my teacher for weeks and each time she says she's too busy so id be really grateful if someone could read and give me their feedback
my feedback was that:
- i need develop my thesis to establish a more convincing thesis
- to embed evidence more effectively by contextualising it in the play
- make a more sustained examination of the play
- develop my arguments before analysing them

I’m a qualified English teacher . I’ve marked HSC . I will mark it for you . Will contact you this evening ( mon)

 

[tigerian]

i did trials and my crucible essay was severely my weakest essay by a long shot (i got 14/20) and so ive been editing my essay quite a lot to make it better but ive been trying to organise a meeting with my teacher for weeks and each time she says she's too busy so id be really grateful if someone could read and give me their feedback
my feedback was that:
- i need develop my thesis to establish a more convincing thesis
- to embed evidence more effectively by contextualising it in the play
- make a more sustained examination of the play
- develop my arguments before analysing them

i did trials and my crucible essay was severely my weakest essay by a long shot (i got 14/20) and so ive been editing my essay quite a lot to make it better but ive been trying to organise a meeting with my teacher for weeks and each time she says she's too busy so id be really grateful if someone could read and give me their feedback
my feedback was that:
- i need develop my thesis to establish a more convincing thesis
- to embed evidence more effectively by contextualising it in the play
- make a more sustained examination of the play
- develop my arguments before analysing them

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[helloworld987]

please see your pm . Your feedback is done and ready

hi sorry but i cant see it are you sure you sent it (i might not be looking in the right place tho)

 

[tigerian]

hi sorry but i cant see it are you sure you sent it (i might not be looking in the right place tho)

I sent you a pm l I need your email . Details are in the message I sent you

 

[tigerian]

I sent you a pm l I need your email . Details are in the message I sent you

I’ve made an error . i will fix it shortly . Stand by stand for for the correct information which I will send at 830pm Monday night

 

[tigerian]

hi sorry but i cant see it are you sure you sent it (i might not be looking in the right place tho)

I’ve made an error . i will fix it shortly . Stand by stand for for the correct information which I will send at 830pm Monday night

 

[tigerian]

hi sorry but i cant see it are you sure you sent it (i might not be looking in the right place tho)

I have startedmy feedback . Please see the message I sent to your pm so I can get the feedback to you . I apologise for sending late . I thought I had sent info . info should be there now