Anybody willing to read/edit/comment on my essay? (2 Viewers)

[fauxpas18]

It's not finished yet, but I would appreciate it if any English essay whizzes who have already completed the HSC would give me feedback on my unfinished essay. I'm still trying to perfect my essay writing skills!

I might PM you the essay.
Thanks.

 

[fauxpas18]

C'mon...

 

[fauxpas18]

Engage me
Let me breathe the courage of your actions
Don't hold back make it be for the good

The truth is
I am not your cure but I can help you
Find a way to reconcile the dark
Don't hold back
Is there anybody out there

feeling something?
Don't hold back
Is there anybody out there feeling something?
Stay right there
Cause I want to watch you taking off your morning
And putting on that midnight smile for me
You're chasing
The slow motion belief that you are dreaming
And running from the things that make you feel
Don't hold back
Is there anybody out there feeling something?
Don't hold back
Is there anybody out there feeling something?

 

[Aerath]

You literally waited only 30 mins for a reply, and you bumped your thread twice....

 

[fauxpas18]

You literally waited only 30 mins for a reply, and you bumped your thread twice....

Yeah, because I needed it to be read over there and then.

Any English whiz ex-student willing to read?

 

[Aerath]

Yeah, your continued bumping makes me not wanna help you.

 

[fauxpas18]

Yeah, your continued bumping makes me not wanna help you.

Even if you had offered, I wouldn't have taken it up, since you're not an English whiz, and theoretically, your HSC hasn't finished.

stupid idiot. no patience. don't help please.

Yeah dats fully sikh man bro.

 

[xLilith]

Even if you had offered, I wouldn't have taken it up, since you're not an English whiz, and theoretically, your HSC hasn't finished.

And you have to be finished HSC be an English whiz, right?

Where ever did you get that idea?

I bow to your superior logic.

 

[Jeee]

And you have to be finished HSC be an English whiz, right?

Where ever did you get that idea?

I bow to your superior logic.

Think about it dolt. Somebody still in highschool could use their essay, concepts and ideas. I sneer at your narrow-mindedness.

 

[Aerath]

Think about it dolt. Somebody still in highschool could use their essay, concepts and ideas. I sneer at your narrow-mindedness.

Because I have so much use for an essay right now?

 

[Nicola1616]

It's not finished yet, but I would appreciate it if any English essay whizzes who have already completed the HSC would give me feedback on my unfinished essay. I'm still trying to perfect my essay writing skills!

I might PM you the essay.
Thanks.

Happy to have a look
Don't be deterred by Sikhman and Aerath, I mean those guys are awesomely intelligent, that's clear, but they do nothing but spook around this site playing tag team bitches.
It's all over for you boys - get a job, stalk some girls or something. Oh and stop torturing all of those cats!

 

[pman]

oh wtf, send it to me

 

[xLilith]

Think about it dolt. Somebody still in highschool could use their essay, concepts and ideas. I sneer at your narrow-mindedness.

...They can use it during the period in which the HSC is marked?

That works out, how exactly?

I laugh at your idiocy.

 

[Nicola1616]

yess aerath lets go find someone else to tag team...

wtf lol

"Yess" - Sikhman
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