would anyone be the kindest nicest person on the earth and read my crucible essay i need help desperately (1 Viewer)

[helloworld987]

i did trials and my crucible essay was severely my weakest essay by a long shot (i got 14/20) and so ive been editing my essay quite a lot to make it better but ive been trying to organise a meeting with my teacher for weeks and each time she says she's too busy so id be really grateful if someone could read and give me their feedback
my feedback was that:
- i need develop my thesis to establish a more convincing thesis
- to embed evidence more effectively by contextualising it in the play
- make a more sustained examination of the play
- develop my arguments before analysing them

 

[bj_flamingo]

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