Read my story? (1 Viewer)

[OutOfOrder]

Yeah i had to write the first chapter of a crime fiction story for an assignment... its due first day back at school.
I was wondering if anyone could read it and give me some ideas on what i need to add etc? I had subversion in mind, but it didn't turn out the way i planned.
I'd really appreciate it.
Just reply and i'll send it to you.

 

[glitterfairy]

If you don't get any other takers - I didn't do Crime Fiction, but did do EE2 (if that's of any substance) and would be happy to look over it if you'd like.

 

[Aimz- Lou.]

Pick me. I'll read it.

 

[illodous]

Yeah i had to write the first chapter of a crime fiction story for an assignment... its due first day back at school.
I was wondering if anyone could read it and give me some ideas on what i need to add etc? I had subversion in mind, but it didn't turn out the way i planned.
I'd really appreciate it.
Just reply and i'll send it to you.

Try posting into this thread; those who view it would be more than happy to critique.