can anyone provide any feedback on my 1984 essay? (1 Viewer)

[afourgridbook]

I have an in class essay with an unseen question for 1984 next week, is anyone able to provide me some feedback on a practice essay I have written? any help would be greatly appreciated just private msg me thank you!!

 

[tigerian]

I have an in class essay with an unseen question for 1984 next week, is anyone able to provide me some feedback on a practice essay I have written? any help would be greatly appreciated just private msg me thank you!!

I’m an English teacher and I’ve taught 1984 at hsc level . See your pm