Firstly, thank god I didn't read it last night, because to be honest, I rather struggled to get my head around it. I could give you the notes I wrote while I read it, but looking back after reading your reflection they seem rather pale. To be completely truthful, much of what you were trying to execute was lost on me. However the reflection statement really was beautifully written and thought provoking. Whereas I found much of the story too convoluted (I think, despite what you said in your reflection, you had too many characters for a poor little reader to keep up with - as Kurt Vonnegut says, pity the reader) the reflection was crystal clear, and it was actually that not the story that made me think about the idea of salvation and Lucifer.
Thinking about the actual ideas of your work, rather than the story itself, I find myself facing a simple answer. It said in your reflection statement that you're religious, I'm actively not. Maybe in that sense, the work couldn't have as much an impact on me, as to me Satan is merely another over-simplified opposition against an over-simplified God, and the idea of his salvation was not abhorrent or strange to me.
Reading your reflection, with the idea of assimilating moderinism and romanticism to create postmoderism, really is ambitious and interesting. I don't know whether you are more a creative writer or a critical one, but your reflection had a great style and was genuinly engaging. I would like to know what you thought happened to Lucifer; did he deserve salavation?
If it's any consolation to me not understanding your work, I am familiar with the ideas surrounding Paradise Lost, but I've never read beyond the first couple of pages. Also, I had never heard of Lilith or that dimension before, so perhaps the allusions went over my head. That being said, the Blake poem and Twain quote were aptly placed and, especially Twain's got me thinking. I've also shamelessly stolen that Blake poem and might use it as a related... I'm a bastard...
By the way, the graphic child killing and boob descriptions - ' her breasts threatening to escape their scarlet prison' were super distracting. The whole concept and idea however, really is very... confronting and I think it would be brilliant discussion/exposition fodder.
Sorry if I missed the point entirely!