in my opinion; this is an excellent short story. strong intro, but i agree with kilastria.. an awareness of the surroundings would have been nice^^ BUT! all in all.. still an excellent piece.. makes me want to write something again hehe =P
i especially liked that part hehe =P don't know why...
whoa.. i guess i should feel lucky then.. 0o" lol.. my software teacher's pretty cool.. and VERY patient^^
but.. unfortunately, due to afew problems.. i've missed out on ALOT of classes, and am currently screwing SDD T.T lol..
I LOVE FLOWCHARTS! XD haha *sry.. randomness.. >.>* lol