vajayjay
Well-Known Member
biggest thing ive seen (as a student) is that people don't link their analysis to their purpose correctly.fr? what exactly do they take marks off for?
So saying that the repitition of "and every" shows that desire is a complex human motivation within the human expeirence. But how? How tf does repitition correlate. You could've put any quote there and it would make no difference. You need to deeply link the anlysis to purpose. I.e. The continual repitition of "and every" shows that desire is a continually inescapable part of the human experience.
At least with the 2nd one (although still a bit weak), you're correlating the technique DIRECTLY to your argument.